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Message from airis posted on 07-02-2017 at 23:42:08 (D | E | F)
I am trying to improve my writing skills and wrote the sentence below, can you please evaluate the sentence from a native perspective?
Thanks in advance ,
"The fundamental principle of veterinary science education is to raise conciseness about animal health care issues and animal welfare, ethic problems among veterinarian candidates."
Edited by lucile83 on 08-02-2017 07:11
Re: One sentence/ Correction from gerondif, posted on 08-02-2017 at 00:26:43 (D | E)
It is a long sentence, you need a five-litre lung capacity to read it through !
Did you mean conciseness or consciousness ?
"The fundamental principle of veterinary science education is to raise conciseness(consciousness?) about animal health care issues and animal welfare, ethical problems among veterinarian candidates."
Re: One sentence/ Correction from soei, posted on 17-02-2017 at 07:48:33 (D | E)
I also think it is very long . The reader misses the aim of the sentence and also it's meaning during the reading it. Please rewrite.
It's the first and most important problem.
Have a nice time with my answer!
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