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Message de arpagiont posté le 17-09-2007 à 18:39:26 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour
J'ai fait un texte sur le jour du pardon en Australie qui est le jour ou les australiens s'excusent du mal qu'ils ont fait aux Aborigènes durant leurs colonies .Si quelqu'un serrait d'accord de le corriger .
I think that a good think that Australian’s people don’t forget what their elders had do to the Aborigines and I think that the sorry day can be a good way to not forget I think it’s important for the goods relations between Austialians and Aborigines .Well on I can understand that some people refuse to participate because they wouldn’t pay for their elders .But I can understand that some people want taht Aborigines have no right and win election .I think that if Australia would be a multicultural country it would find a solution and that Aborigines would be threat normally .
Merci
Arpagiont
Message de arpagiont posté le 17-09-2007 à 18:39:26 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour
J'ai fait un texte sur le jour du pardon en Australie qui est le jour ou les australiens s'excusent du mal qu'ils ont fait aux Aborigènes durant leurs colonies .Si quelqu'un serrait d'accord de le corriger .
I think that a good think that Australian’s people don’t forget what their elders had do to the Aborigines and I think that the sorry day can be a good way to not forget I think it’s important for the goods relations between Austialians and Aborigines .Well on I can understand that some people refuse to participate because they wouldn’t pay for their elders .But I can understand that some people want taht Aborigines have no right and win election .I think that if Australia would be a multicultural country it would find a solution and that Aborigines would be threat normally .
Merci
Arpagiont
Réponse: Correction texte 'the sorry day' de jean31, postée le 17-09-2007 à 18:48:13 (S | E)
Bonjour,
En rouge, ce qu'il faut revoir, pour commencer...
I think that (1 verbe ?) a good think that Australian’s people don’t forget what their elders had do to the Aborigines.(nouvelle phrase SVP !)=> and I think that the sorry day can be a good way to not forget.(nouvelle phrase encore !)=> I think it’s important for the goods relations between Austialians and Aborigines. Well on I can understand that some people refuse to participate because they wouldn’t pay for their elders. But I can understand that some people want taht Aborigines have no right and win election. I think that if Australia would be a multicultural country it would find a solution and that Aborigines would be threat normally .
Réponse: Correction texte 'the sorry day' de arpagiont, postée le 17-09-2007 à 19:35:21 (S | E)
Merci pour vos remarques voici mon texte
I think that is a good thing that Australian people don’t forget what their elders had done to the Aborigines. I think too that the sorry day can be a good way to not forget. I think it’s important for the good relations between Australians and Aborigines. Sure I can understand that some people refuse to participate because they wouldn’t pay for their elders. But I can’t understand that some people want that Aborigines have no right and win election. I think that if Australia want be a multicultural country it would find a solution and Aborigines would be threatened normally .
Réponse: Correction texte 'the sorry day' de willy, postée le 17-09-2007 à 20:24:43 (S | E)
Hello !
Attention : to want + proposition infinitive :
"I want them to do it" et non "I want that they do it" (cette structure n'existe pas).
Réponse: Correction texte 'the sorry day' de arpagiont, postée le 17-09-2007 à 21:00:25 (S | E)
Je vous remercie pour vos réponses .
Réponse: Correction texte 'the sorry day' de jean31, postée le 17-09-2007 à 21:18:33 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
C'est nettement mieux. Voici donc le coup de pouce en bleu.
I think that it is a good thing that Australian people don’t forget what their elders had done to the Aborigines. I also think that the sorry day can be a good way to not forget. I think it’s important for the good relations between Australians and Aborigines. Sure I can understand that some people refuse to participate because they wouldn’t pay for their elders. But I can’t understand that some people want Aborigines to have no right and win election. I think that if Australia wanted to be a multicultural country it would find a solution and Aborigines would be treated (treated = traités et non threatened = menacés, je suppose)normally .
