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superhero‘s duty (correction)
Message de flo3299 posté le 15-12-2008 à 19:35:18 (S | E | F)
Bonjour a tous, je me permets de poster ce petit texte pour que vous puissiez juste me dire où se trouve les fautes ( s'il y en a :p )
Merci d'avance
At midday , in a building site, Hancock and Superman argued about superhero‘s duty:
-You’re supposed to help people, not to stay on the street, drinking all day long, You’ve to be useful for the world.
- Stop that, you know, you’re ridiculous to help them every time, think about you. With your powers you could be rich, unknown, get what you want when you want and where you want.
You should think about you first, people don’t deserve to be helped, you ought to forget your duties na think about you!
-Who are you ? A kind of anti-superhero ?
You should be sober before talking and not pretend that you’re a good person. Be useful, smart, helpful, merciful with yourself, and then you will a good superhero as me!!
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Modifié par bridg le 15-12-2008 19:35
Message de flo3299 posté le 15-12-2008 à 19:35:18 (S | E | F)
Bonjour a tous, je me permets de poster ce petit texte pour que vous puissiez juste me dire où se trouve les fautes ( s'il y en a :p )
Merci d'avance
At midday , in a building site, Hancock and Superman argued about superhero‘s duty:
-You’re supposed to help people, not to stay on the street, drinking all day long, You’ve to be useful for the world.
- Stop that, you know, you’re ridiculous to help them every time, think about you. With your powers you could be rich, unknown, get what you want when you want and where you want.
You should think about you first, people don’t deserve to be helped, you ought to forget your duties na think about you!
-Who are you ? A kind of anti-superhero ?
You should be sober before talking and not pretend that you’re a good person. Be useful, smart, helpful, merciful with yourself, and then you will a good superhero as me!!
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Modifié par bridg le 15-12-2008 19:35
Réponse: superhero‘s duty (correction) de hoger, postée le 15-12-2008 à 20:53:55 (S | E)
At midday, in a building site [« in a building » ou « on a site »], Hancock and Superman argued about [ article ! – « le devoir d'un super-héro »] superhero's duty:
- You're supposed to help people, not to stay on the street, drinking all day long, You've [ pour insister, il vaut mieux dire soit « you have to » ( la forme complète ) soit « you've got to »; un "'ve" non-accentué n'est pas assez fort ] to be useful for the world.
- Stop that, you know, you're ridiculous to help them every time, think about you [ c.-à-d. « vous-même »?]. With your powers you could be rich, unknown, get what you want when you want it and where you want it.
You should think about you [ c.-à-d. « vous-même »?] first, people don't deserve to be helped, you ought to forget your duties na think about you [ c.-à-d. « vous-même »?]!
- Who are you? A kind of anti-superhero?
You should be sober before [ peut-être pas « avant », mais au moins « lorsque »] talking and not pretend that you're a good person. Be useful, smart, helpful, merciful with yourself, and then you will [ infinitif !] a good superhero me as [« a good superhero like me » ou « a superhero as good as me »]!!
Réponse: superhero‘s duty (correction) de flo3299, postée le 15-12-2008 à 21:15:27 (S | E)
At midday , in a building site, Hancock and Superman argued about superhero‘s duty:
-You’re supposed to help people, not to stay on the street, drinking all day long, You have to be useful for the world.
- Stop that, you know, you’re ridiculous to help them every time, think of yourself Superman.A poor little girl has just to asking for help, and Superman's coming! pitiful ! With your powers you could be rich, unknown, get what you want when you want it and where you want it and stop to be the dog of anybody!Besides your costume is ashamed, you look like a clown!
You should think about you first man, people don’t deserve to be helped, you ought to forget your duties!
-Who are you ? A kind of anti-superhero ?
You should be sober when you talk and not pretend that you’re a good person. Be useful, smart, helpful, merciful with yourself, and then you will be a superhero as good as me!!
Réponse: superhero‘s duty (correction) de flo3299, postée le 16-12-2008 à 17:57:27 (S | E)
personne ?
Réponse: superhero‘s duty (correction) de flo3299, postée le 17-12-2008 à 18:29:42 (S | E)
s'il vous plaît,, pourriez vous me dire si le nouveau texte est mieux ?
Merci d'avance
