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Message de worms2d posté le 02-03-2009 à 20:00:40 (S | E | F)
Je dois faire un devoir de 300mots qui répond à ce sujet:
Would you be ready to go and work in a different environment than the one you grew up in ?
J'ai compris vite fait ce qu'il fallait faire 2 paragraphes, 1 ou je dis que c'est bien(je donne les avantages) et 1 autre ou je dis que c'est pas marrant, etc
Et enfin une conclusion ou je dis si je suis prêt à partir ou pas.
J'aimerais que vous m'aidiez à corriger les fautes et que vous me donniez des arguments pour les 2 catégories parce que je suis loin des 300mots. merci
j'ai commencé par ça(227 mots):
It would be a hard thing to leave my city and go to a different environment. If I do that, I would lose all my friends. I would get confused because I would not know the new place where I would be living. For me, this environment would be new and the people there would be like strangers. I would need some time to get used to this new life. At the beginning, I would certainly be all alone since I would not know anybody.
However, it could also be good a thing to change of environment. In that new place, I would discover new landscapes and meet new people. I could also make new friends. I would have to start over my life. This new life may even be better than my previous life. I like the idea of learning new things and seeing how different people live. I would need to find an interesting job which I like doing. I would have to find a nice flat or a house where to live.
Finally, it is a hard choice to make. By moving to a new place, I could learn lots of things even if I would lose my friends, my job, and my home. There are many advantages but too many inconveniences. If it is possible, I would prefer to stay in my current environment.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 02-03-2009 22:14
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Message de worms2d posté le 02-03-2009 à 20:00:40 (S | E | F)
Je dois faire un devoir de 300mots qui répond à ce sujet:
Would you be ready to go and work in a different environment than the one you grew up in ?
J'ai compris vite fait ce qu'il fallait faire 2 paragraphes, 1 ou je dis que c'est bien(je donne les avantages) et 1 autre ou je dis que c'est pas marrant, etc
Et enfin une conclusion ou je dis si je suis prêt à partir ou pas.
J'aimerais que vous m'aidiez à corriger les fautes et que vous me donniez des arguments pour les 2 catégories parce que je suis loin des 300mots. merci
j'ai commencé par ça(227 mots):
It would be a hard thing to leave my city and go to a different environment. If I do that, I would lose all my friends. I would get confused because I would not know the new place where I would be living. For me, this environment would be new and the people there would be like strangers. I would need some time to get used to this new life. At the beginning, I would certainly be all alone since I would not know anybody.
However, it could also be good a thing to change of environment. In that new place, I would discover new landscapes and meet new people. I could also make new friends. I would have to start over my life. This new life may even be better than my previous life. I like the idea of learning new things and seeing how different people live. I would need to find an interesting job which I like doing. I would have to find a nice flat or a house where to live.
Finally, it is a hard choice to make. By moving to a new place, I could learn lots of things even if I would lose my friends, my job, and my home. There are many advantages but too many inconveniences. If it is possible, I would prefer to stay in my current environment.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 02-03-2009 22:14
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Réponse: Work in a different environment/correctio de lucile83, postée le 02-03-2009 à 22:17:34 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Nous ne donnons pas d'idées ni de sujets de rédaction ou de travail littéraire;c'est à vous de trouver cela.Nous sommes un site d'apprentissage de langues.Vous rédigez votre texte.Ensuite nous pourrons corriger votre travail sur la base de ce que vous avez fait.
Cordialement.
Réponse: Work in a different environment/correctio de laure95, postée le 03-03-2009 à 19:20:34 (S | E)
Bonsoir, voici les corrections à effectuer:
It would be a hard thing to leave my city and go to a different environment. If I do (pas le bon temps) that, I would lose all my friends. I would get confused because I would not know the new place where I would be living. For me, this environment would be new and the people there would be like strangers. I would need some time to get used to this new life. At the beginning, I would certainly be
However, it could also be good a thing (pas dans le bon ordre) to change of environment. In that new place, I would discover new landscapes and meet new people. I could also make new friends. I would have to start over my life. This new life may even be better than my previous life. I like the idea of learning new things and seeing how different people live. I would need to find an interesting job which I would like doing. I would have to find a nice flat or a house where to live.
Finally, it is a hard choice to make. By moving to a new place, I could learn lots of things even if I would lose my friends, my job, and my home. There are many advantages but too many inconveniences. If it is possible, I would prefer to stay in my current environment.
