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Message de sm posté le 01-09-2009 ŕ 19:28:39 (S | E | F)
hello every body;
I'm a beginner in English,andfor to improve my language I started writing short stories,I have already read one,and I have just summarized it.Could you please correct it for me? its title is:Aunt owl's treasure.
here is the summary:
""In a ghost house,where Jha shepherds near it every day his master's herd,live an owl.One day,Jha heard it singing,he got in the house,he found it goggling at him.He proposed to it to buy his cattle for the price of three thousand Dirhams,Jha left the cattle to the owl that he will come back in the afternoon to take his money.Jha returned to his master and told him all what happened,this last(the master) threatened to sue him for a theft if he didn't give him the money.For these words Jha ran to the owl'house asking for money.But the owl was refused,so Jha got angry and threw a stone near it,the owl took a running jumb into its hole.Jha chased after it and came across an earthenware jar full of coins.He told it to not be afraid because he will only take his money.Jha returned to hand the money to his master.the master surprised how did the owl come to give him the sum of money.Jha told him all what happened.the master went out,for pretext that he will close the earthenware whose jha probably forgot it open.As soon as he arrived he stole all owl's money.For that Jha went quickly to the lawcourt to sue his master.But Jha was a bit foolish;because before they went to the owl's house ,his master created a trick for Jha,he grilled chickpea and threw it over Jha's shoulder in the way,by that Jha tought that was raining chickpea.themaster affirmed to he judge that Jha was mentally ill,and for to prove that,he asked him to ask Jha what day he has stolen the money.Jha answered that was the day when it was raining chickpea.the juddge got furious and ask Jha to clear out.Jha made his apologies to his friend the owl.""
sorry...It's long!!
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Edited by lucile83 on 01-09-2009 20:49
Message de sm posté le 01-09-2009 ŕ 19:28:39 (S | E | F)
hello every body;
I'm a beginner in English,and
here is the summary:
""In a ghost house,where Jha shepherds near it every day his master's herd,live an owl.One day,Jha heard it singing,he got in the house,he found it goggling at him.He proposed to it to buy his cattle for the price of three thousand Dirhams,Jha left the cattle to the owl that he will come back in the afternoon to take his money.Jha returned to his master and told him all what happened,this last(the master) threatened to sue him for a theft if he didn't give him the money.For these words Jha ran to the owl'house asking for money.But the owl was refused,so Jha got angry and threw a stone near it,the owl took a running jumb into its hole.Jha chased after it and came across an earthenware jar full of coins.He told it to not be afraid because he will only take his money.Jha returned to hand the money to his master.the master surprised how did the owl come to give him the sum of money.Jha told him all what happened.the master went out,for pretext that he will close the earthenware whose jha probably forgot it open.As soon as he arrived he stole all owl's money.For that Jha went quickly to the lawcourt to sue his master.But Jha was a bit foolish;because before they went to the owl's house ,his master created a trick for Jha,he grilled chickpea and threw it over Jha's shoulder in the way,by that Jha tought that was raining chickpea.themaster affirmed to he judge that Jha was mentally ill,and for to prove that,he asked him to ask Jha what day he has stolen the money.Jha answered that was the day when it was raining chickpea.the juddge got furious and ask Jha to clear out.Jha made his apologies to his friend the owl.""
sorry...It's long!!
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Edited by lucile83 on 01-09-2009 20:49
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