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Expression écrite - What is your idea of
Message de kev55 posté le 30-10-2009 à 15:21:07 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, pouvez vous m'aider à corriger cette expression écrite s'il vous plaît.
What is your idea of a prestigious job?
It is generally accepted that wealth, fame and fortune help us to be accepted in our modern society.
At first, a prestigious job corresponds to a work which is respected, which asks to make some things of importance. It could be a job which gives you public recognition, or a job that is useful to your community. For examples : people who work for NGOs or scientist who look for cures for diseases because they arouse the admiration.
But, It cannot be denied that a prestigious job is often linked with money.
For many people, the idea of a prestigious job is based on the fact that there is a good salary. Furthermore, I also considere that to be business manager is a prestigious job.
We may wonder to what extent showing off is the reflection of happiness.
This issue leads us to the famous saying : money can't buy happiness.
All things considered, we may claim that a prestigious job is for me linked with a well-paid job but who arouses the admiration and give me many happiness.
Merci d'avance à tous ceux qui m'aideront.
Message de kev55 posté le 30-10-2009 à 15:21:07 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, pouvez vous m'aider à corriger cette expression écrite s'il vous plaît.
What is your idea of a prestigious job?
It is generally accepted that wealth, fame and fortune help us to be accepted in our modern society.
At first, a prestigious job corresponds to a work which is respected, which asks to make some things of importance. It could be a job which gives you public recognition, or a job that is useful to your community. For examples : people who work for NGOs or scientist who look for cures for diseases because they arouse the admiration.
But, It cannot be denied that a prestigious job is often linked with money.
For many people, the idea of a prestigious job is based on the fact that there is a good salary. Furthermore, I also considere that to be business manager is a prestigious job.
We may wonder to what extent showing off is the reflection of happiness.
This issue leads us to the famous saying : money can't buy happiness.
All things considered, we may claim that a prestigious job is for me linked with a well-paid job but who arouses the admiration and give me many happiness.
Merci d'avance à tous ceux qui m'aideront.
Réponse: Expression écrite - What is your idea of de laure95, postée le 30-10-2009 à 18:10:14 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Que dire à part very well-done job!
Juste 1 ou 2 petites fautes d'inattention ou de frappe:
What is your idea of a prestigious job?
It is generally accepted that wealth, fame and fortune help us to be accepted in our modern society.
At first, a prestigious job corresponds to a work which is respected, which asks to make some things of importance (tu peux préciser un peu). It could be a job which gives you public recognition, or a job that is useful to your community. For examples : people who work for NGOs or scientist who look for cures for diseases because they arouse the admiration.
But, It cannot be denied that a prestigious job is often linked with money.
For many people, the idea of a prestigious job is based on the fact that there is (mal dit) a good salary. Furthermore, I also considere (orthographe) that to be a business manager is a prestigious job.
We may wonder to what extent showing off is the reflection of happiness.
This issue leads us to the famous saying : money can't buy happiness.
All things considered, we may claim that a prestigious job is for me linked with a well-paid job but who (l'antécédent n'est pas une personne) arouses the admiration and give (3è personne du singulier) me many happiness.
Réponse: Expression écrite - What is your idea of de kev55, postée le 31-10-2009 à 20:17:20 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup laure95 pour cette correction.
What is your idea of a prestigious job?
It is generally accepted that wealth, fame and fortune help us to be accepted in our modern society.
At first, a prestigious job corresponds to a work which is respected (j'ai supprimé l'autre moitié de phrase je ne peux pas développer je suis limité à 150 mots donc j'ai préférais supprimer). It could be a job which gives you public recognition, or a job that is useful to your community. For examples : people who work for NGOs or scientist who look for cures for diseases because they arouse the admiration.
But, It cannot be denied that a prestigious job is often linked with money.
For many people, the idea of a prestigious job is based on the fact that there is (que mettre à la place) a good salary. Furthermore, I also consider that to be a business manager is a prestigious job.
We may wonder to what extent showing off is the reflection of happiness.
This issue leads us to the famous saying : money can't buy happiness.
All things considered, we may claim that a prestigious job is for me linked with a well-paid job but which arouses the admiration and gives me many happiness.
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