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The Floating House - Correction
Message de skiz posté le 30-10-2010 à 18:55:13 (S | E | F)
Hello !
j'ai un petit travail à réaliser, pourriez-vous m'aider en m'indiquant les erreurs que j'ai écrites ?
Voici le texte :
The Oil-Barrel House is a floating house which respects the environment and uses recycling stuff as building materials. The house is build on a pontoon made from recycled oil barrels : when there is no more oil, millions of barrels will have no more utility. All barrels are filled with a new ultra-floating foam, derived from polystyrene. A very strong steel framework supports and fastens all the barrels together and permits the house to float. Regarding the walls, they are made of insulating bricks with steel reinforcements that support the first floor.
The Oil-Barrel House produces itself the energy it needs. The shape of the roof has been designed to canalize the wind to a roof wind turbine. There is an other turbine under the house : the river currents drive a marine turbine. In addition to the two turbine, a large solar panel on the roof use light energy from the sun to generate electricity and batteries in the floor harvest the energy. Large windows permit to light the roomsand to heat the house thanks to the sun's rays. At night, LED lights are used for lighting the rooms which save energy due to the low consuption of those lamps.
So, this house is very eco-friendly. It uses renewable energies and recycling materials. Moreover the house is very safe : the flood can't damage the house because it fits onto the lake's or river's level. It only remains to find a location beside the water where the occupents can enjoy the landscape from the terrace.
Je vous remercie d'avance !
Message de skiz posté le 30-10-2010 à 18:55:13 (S | E | F)
Hello !
j'ai un petit travail à réaliser, pourriez-vous m'aider en m'indiquant les erreurs que j'ai écrites ?
Voici le texte :
The Oil-Barrel House is a floating house which respects the environment and uses recycling stuff as building materials. The house is build on a pontoon made from recycled oil barrels : when there is no more oil, millions of barrels will have no more utility. All barrels are filled with a new ultra-floating foam, derived from polystyrene. A very strong steel framework supports and fastens all the barrels together and permits the house to float. Regarding the walls, they are made of insulating bricks with steel reinforcements that support the first floor.
The Oil-Barrel House produces itself the energy it needs. The shape of the roof has been designed to canalize the wind to a roof wind turbine. There is an other turbine under the house : the river currents drive a marine turbine. In addition to the two turbine, a large solar panel on the roof use light energy from the sun to generate electricity and batteries in the floor harvest the energy. Large windows permit to light the roomsand to heat the house thanks to the sun's rays. At night, LED lights are used for lighting the rooms which save energy due to the low consuption of those lamps.
So, this house is very eco-friendly. It uses renewable energies and recycling materials. Moreover the house is very safe : the flood can't damage the house because it fits onto the lake's or river's level. It only remains to find a location beside the water where the occupents can enjoy the landscape from the terrace.
Je vous remercie d'avance !
Réponse: The Floating House - Correction de notrepere, postée le 30-10-2010 à 19:17:01 (S | E)
Hello!The Oil-Barrel House is a floating house which respects the environment and uses recycling [en forme d'un adjectif] stuff as building materials. The house is build [passé] on a pontoon made from recycled oil barrels : [mauvaise ponctuation: point] When there is no more oil, millions of barrels will have no more utility (use ou useful purpose). All barrels are filled with a new ultra-floating foam, derived from polystyrene. A very strong steel framework supports and fastens all the barrels together and permits the house to float. Regarding the walls, they are made of insulating bricks with steel reinforcements that support the first floor.
The Oil-Barrel House produces itself the energy it needs ['its own energy' est plus courrant]. The shape of the roof has been designed to canalize
the wind to a roof wind turbine. There is an other [pas d'espace: another] turbine under the house: the river currents drive a marine turbine. In addition to the two turbine [deux = pluriel], a large solar panel on the roof use [accorde: panel] light energy from the sun to generate electricity and batteries in the floor harvest the energy. Large windows permit the sun to light the rooms and to heat the house So, this house is very eco-friendly. It uses renewable energies and recycling [en forme d'un adjectif] materials. Moreover the house is very safe : the (a) flood can't damage the house because it fits [un autre verbe] onto the lake's or river's level. It only remains to find a location beside the water where the occupents [orthographe] can enjoy the landscape from the terrace.
Cordialement
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Modifié par notrepere le 30-10-2010 20:54
Réponse: The Floating House - Correction de skiz, postée le 30-10-2010 à 21:54:27 (S | E)
Merci pour votre réponse rapide, j'ai essayé de corriger :
The Oil-Barrel House is a floating house which respects the environment and uses recycled stuff as building materials. The house was build on a pontoon made from recycled oil barrels. When there is no more oil, millions of barrels will have no more useful purpose. All barrels are filled with a new ultra-floating foam, derived from polystyrene. A very strong steel framework supports and fastens all the barrels together and permits the house to float. Regarding the walls, they are made of insulating bricks with steel reinforcements that support the first floor.
The Oil-Barrel House produces its own energy. The shape of the roof has been designed to channel
the wind to a roof wind turbine. There is another turbine under the house: the river currents drive a marine turbine. In addition to the two turbines, a large solar panel on the roof uses light energy from the sun to generate electricity and batteries in the floor harvest the energy. Large windows permit to the sun to light the rooms and to heat the house. At night, LED lights are used for lighting the rooms which save energy due to the low consumption of those lamps.So, this house is very eco-friendly. It uses renewable energies and recycled materials. Moreover the house is very safe : a flood can't damage the house because it adapts to the lake's or river's level. It only remains to find a location beside the water where the occupants can enjoy the landscape from the terrace.
Réponse: The Floating House - Correction de notrepere, postée le 31-10-2010 à 00:34:01 (S | E)
Hello! A mon avis, presque parfait...The Oil-Barrel House is a floating house which respects the environment and uses recycled stuff as building materials. The house was build (is built) ...
... Large windows permit
Très bon travail
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